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Selling souvenirs,
falling through the atmosphere;

my heart is nothing
but a thread on unsure sleeves,
fraying at the seams.

Yet I still come home to
your crystal clavicles,

giving salt to shores;

a new ocean to explore.

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I seem to always give pieces of myself like souvenirs... but back to the poem: I had a lot of fun writing this! I wrote this more with a tune in mind, and therefore I tried to discipline myself into giving it a structured rhythm. I hope it can be received well!
(also, if this is in the wrong category please let me know... it just didn't seem free verse to me ^^;)
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*imaginative-lioness Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have featured this piece in my journal: [link]
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~Nullibicity Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I am truly honored. :heart:
I especially am grateful someone liked this piece: It is a little different from my usual

Thank you, again (:
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=schongslipper Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm... I don't like the rhymes as they stand, but I feel like they would be a lot better in song form. Is there any way I can hear it?
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~Nullibicity Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've put no tune to it... but if I ever do, I will make sure to contact you.
Perhaps some time I will be able to? Who knows. I am closer to exploring the art of writing songs, however, and that would be thanks to you. I really appreciate you pushing me out of my comfort zone when I need to pushed, and I am really grateful to you for being so honest with me on whether or not I turn out successes or works-in-progress. :love:
You really have helped me grow so much!
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=schongslipper Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so happy I've been helpful! It's been pleasure to be able to give feedback, so it's no problem at all
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~Nullibicity Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am glad you liked it!!
Thank you for taking the time to comment :hug: I really appreciate it!
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Mood: Love ~RenosGirl77 Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely! :) I could almost smell the sea in this one.
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~Nullibicity Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are always far too kind to me. Thank you :hug: :heart:
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~RenosGirl77 Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nonsense!! You are always most welcome. :)
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