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April 26, 2013
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She was grass-stained
with bleeding, bare-foot

because she’d always said
that shoes were for porcelain girls
afraid of callous skin.

and she was not fear.
not anymore.

when it crept in on white
manicured edges,
she would make lions of trembling girls,
which craved and devoured
from her temples
a sunset-blossom

You can't hurt me anymore.

Alternate title: Since October
(and I'm attached to neither, so suggestions are once again open.)

He said with her I look like a little Chihuahua trying to puff up big enough to become a Bulldog. I thought lions sounded better... perhaps because I want to imagine myself something more beautiful and more powerful than a little dog :giggle: but imagery does not last forever.

It's just been a personal-writing week for me, hasn't it? I've been home sick, and when I have too much time I always reflect on the stupidest of things. I hope this could still be enjoyed, though!

Critique, as always, is much appreciated :blowkiss:
(Also please let me know if I should move this to scraps. I don't think too highly of it, but that may be because of the content.)
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You really should feel higher of this, dear--even if the "content" isn't to your liking. (; It's really a rather lovely created some very appealing imagery here--especially that "manicured edges." I can't put my finger on why, but that line keeps drawing my eyes back. There's something very characteristic about it, something very unique. For me, that polished & white image just hits home with the feeling of all this "porcelain."

In essence, an amazing read. ^^
Nullibicity Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your words are so fantastic. I kind of feel undeserving with such kindness, but I really am grateful you took the time to share! Your description of the words "manicured edges" really brought some insight to me, as well, with things I had never thought about before! I was appreciative for the perspective there :D

Thanks so much! You are just lovely :heart:
insomniaplague Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:la: It's nothing, really. I only say what I mean, after all. You are completely deserving of all my words. :hug:
it was really nice!:) Kind of reminds me of how I hate wearing shoes XD
Nullibicity Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: I detest shoes, too. I only wear them when I must.
I thank you for the lovely comment, and I'm so very happy you liked it!
thegirlfromindonesia Featured By Owner May 4, 2013
Ahhahahaha same here XD
no problem:)
shipwreck-stars Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
I like this poem, especially the second stanza! I like how it gives off an image of an adventurous, almost rebellious character. Nicely written, doesn't belong in the scraps?
Nullibicity Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I had not even realized that was the tone! It was such a pleasure to make this discovery, and I thank you for sharing your thoughts and pointing it out! I really enjoy discovering what others think about my poetry :hug:

You are so very kind. Thank you so very much for all your lovely words and thoughts! They are deeply appreciated :heart:
shipwreck-stars Featured By Owner May 4, 2013
You're welcome
DreamingMind-set Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:clap:Lovely poem,:love:
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