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My heart is at home
in breezy points,
for it knows not warmth
to be comfortably smothered.

but my soul feels most safe
when hidden away,
for it fears the commitment
of being committed.


and  what  of  me?


I feel most safe
inside phantoms of darkness,
where one cannnot know my craving…

for I crave the destructing
presence of company…


always aching, itching,

        burning.

:iconnullibicity:
For all that I am and all that I know.
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Something inspired me. This inspiration is fleeting nowadays, so I tried to snatch it up. Your thoughts would be much appreciated... especially if they pertain to the ending: I find myself unsure. (Hopefully I'm still mixing up my style)

:bulletblue: Critique/feedback is most appreciated! :blowkiss: :bulletblue:
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=schongslipper Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm. This has a sing song meter to it, which makes it into a corrupted lullaby. I like that definition of it, for it lacks the imagery of your usual style and instead seems to calmly ponder depression. It's very interesting. Nice variation!
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~Nullibicity Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I had to reread it, and I must say there is a different meter than usual. I'm a person who secretly longs to create music one day (the kind that can produce tears, even if it is simply a song without words)... to hear it sounded like one, then, made me actually happy. Your description of it being "a corrupted lullaby"... what beautiful words; they simply stunned me. I'm unsure if this poem is deserving of such a gorgeous description, but I am glad to have received it, nonetheless. (:
I'm happy to hear it was, indeed, a variation; I knew something felt different, but I was unsure if I could name it. I hope the lack of imagery was not too disappointing or distracting... nevertheless, it was an interesting growing experience for me!
Thanks for your comment! :hug:
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=schongslipper Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'd love to hear that music. You should try out song writing!
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~Nullibicity Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I might dip my toes into the water... but I honestly don't know where to start. Perhaps one of these days I'll just experiment and see where that takes me.
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=schongslipper Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Go for it. I suck at writing songs, but the attempts were fun nonetheless.
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~Nullibicity Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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Ooo! Gave me chills. Beautifully written too. I liked it.
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~Nullibicity Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are so kind!!! Thank you so very much! :hug:
I was so excited to hear it gave you chills... it was such a compliment! I thank you once more for your wonderful comment; I am really appreciative towards the fact you took your time to leave one. It means a lot to me! (:
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~sleepy-kisses Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"For I crave the destructing presence of company" I love that line, I feel like that often :)
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~Nullibicity Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm actually happy that I've found someone else who can understand this feeling; when I explain it, no one has ever expressed understanding. The fact you can understand makes me relieved... though it's not very relieving to feel such an emotion.
Thank you so much for your comment: I am very grateful. I'm glad you liked it! :hug:
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