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I bend
as
she bends,
arms a graceful
bridge of mourning—

our eyes
rippling plains of remembrance.
(but at least we remember)


I lean beside
her,
both hopeless
heaps of wood
and string;


 pirouettes fall
 in time to blurry
 rivers

 and irises plead
 only as allowed:

 moisturizing this
 shell of
 splintered skin.

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14 15 0
(I never
hope to
move.
again. )

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There always seem to be ifs ... but ifs are painful.

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:iconscorpionholiday:
it has a powerful rhythm and everything seems to flow. It's sorrowful, however, but that isn't a bad thing. Sometimes there is beauty in sadness.
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~Nullibicity Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There is much beauty in tragedy, I believe. Look at Shakespeare, for example: so many people love the tragedy of Romeo and Juliet. That, and I personally believe when sadness is turned into beauty, it is a beautiful thing within itself... and it is my dream to one day be able to do this. This is why your comment means so much to me: It is a sign that I may be getting closer (:

Thank you for taking the time to comment! :heart:
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:iconscorpionholiday:
I believe the same. I have always believed that tragedy, sorrow, and death are a beauty that humans can rarely see. I think that's why fall is so beautiful. When the leaves are dying, and everything is withering away, it unwinds and reveals a beauty that's too hard to understand. We're not supposed to find death as sad as we do. We're supposed to understand that it is another part of life, and that nothing would be as important without it.
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~Nullibicity Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I could not agree more with your description! You stole the words right from my heart :love: I wish more people were able to see it in this light. Autumn is, in fact, my favorite season and the object of my frequent obsession. It is just so unique, and it teaches us so many things in its birth and in its death.
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:iconscorpionholiday:
I think if we keep talking about it, eventually that will happen. just keep it up I suppose!!
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*bloodawni Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, this is so beautiful in its sadness. Lovely.
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~Nullibicity Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your comment made me smile!
Thank you so much! :heart:
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~RenosGirl77 Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, there's a whole story within here - your skill with words is just amazing. The atmosphere of loss and grief is offset beautifully by a sense of hope in the final two stanzas. Great job, keep up the fantastic work!! XD
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~Nullibicity Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I always think it's amazing to get comments with new perspective! I had not written this poem with hope in mind, but after reading it with new eyes, I think I can see it does leave the possibility open! I quite enjoy discovering new things about my poetry!

I'm glad you liked it! I'm so grateful, as always, for your wonderful comment :hug:
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~RenosGirl77 2 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome, I'm so glad you found my comments so helpful!! :) I'm amazed, but happy, that my thoughts could have so much of a positive impact!!

You are absolutely welcome, as always - it's a pleasure to read your work, and it only seems fair that I tell you what I think. Also, a lot of the time your poetry moves me so much that I can't contain my feelings. :)

Have a great day and DFTBA!! I can't seem to stop saying that...oh well.
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