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I cram words within murky, hollow spaces,
replicating ways in which blood fills a wound.

I squeeze articles and adjectives—
supporting metaphors and similes—
into tight-fitting corners,
until that which is empty begins to bloat.

The ache of something missing,
the loss of one internal, now painfully unknown:
it finds no satisfaction within passion
and phrases so desperately created, upheld.

Why give transparent, misleading hope…
Does pleasure derive from humiliation—
the catalyzing of previously weakened hearts?
Where is the limit of cruelty defined,
if not in the cries and weeping of dreams:

Language wilts on my fingertips,
turns to ash in my mouth…
the gorge in my throat which partakes in
young suffering.

Yet...
how significant is agony endured within silence,
inside pitiful thoughts?
It is nothing notable of specific emotion,
only biting veracities upon repetition
and foolish belief:

"I am no poet of words."

:iconnullibicity:
Sometimes I just feel like a joke.

I'll probably move this to scraps in a few days: I just wrote it now to combat some emotions/happenings.
It seems negative... but to me there is a somewhat hopeful message at the end, however subtle, an unspoken lesson.
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~Sigma-Echo-Seven Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Such a compelling piece.
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~Nullibicity Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I wanted to thank you for this wonderful comment. I apologize it took me so long to reply (life can keep one quite busy at times); I feel horrible.
Your words, however, made me feel such happiness: I'm glad you liked this poem! I am so appreciative you chose to share your opinion and that you chose to leave a comment. Overall, I am extremely grateful!

Best wishes to you, and I thank you for everything :iconbowplz:
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~Sigma-Echo-Seven Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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~scorpiandoll Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Don't move this to scraps! I think it's amazing!

you choose just those word who make this poem visual. If you understand what I mean.
It's like you SEE the poem instead of reading it...
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~Nullibicity Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: Thank you so much. Your comments always make me smile!
I really appreciate everything you do for me. You are absolutely amazing :heart:

Thanks for everything, again! I am very grateful!
(and I apologize for the late reply)
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~scorpiandoll Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm glad that I can make you smile, it means a lot to me to make someone smile :)

You're welcome you know :)
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~LightOverpowers58 Oct 4, 2012  Student Writer
Dear, you should never feel like a joke when it comes to anything, especially writing. This piece is absolutely gorgeous and has your usual wordplay peeking through.

The third stanza:
The ache of something missing,
the loss of one internal, now painfully unknown:
it finds no satisfaction within passion
and phrases so desperately created, upheld.
has to be my favorite...its truth need not be repeated.
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~Nullibicity Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You always make me feel a hundred times better, and you inspire such empowerment within me. Thank you! I hope I do not tire you with my many mood fluctuations; I am an emotionally-based person, so I am easily swayed.

I am very excited you liked this poem, however! The fact you also loved the third stanza made me smile: that specific stanza was of course the most personal and the most meaningful (to me, anyway). You always seem to pick out the ones I put the most feeling into :giggle:
Thank you for always reading my work and giving such honest feedback: I cannot express my gratitude enough! :huggle: :rose:
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~LightOverpowers58 Oct 4, 2012  Student Writer
I'm glad I did so much with so little words...(Sorry for that by the way, I was still trying to process the piece ^^;)

You are welcome for the feedback, I am always glad to give it. :hug:

Ah, I seem to have a knack for choosing stanzas like those...they tend to be the ones to hit me the hardest.

What mood fluctuations?
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~Nullibicity Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh no worries: to me, you always have such lovely words! It does not matter how many there are, as the content always stuns me and brings forth my gratitude :love:

Well, I'm not a naturally positive person (though, is anyone?). Actually, I used to be very negative. Some recent events (I posted a journal asking for advice) have had me feeling rather low. I'm also a more... dependent person, which often leaves me with moods that sway from depressed to irritable. I try my best to stay positive, but I find my emotions often affect me (professionals have told me I'm very sensitive emotionally)... thus my confidence sometimes shatters in areas... hence the "I sometimes feel like a joke" statement. :shrug:

But I'm working on it! The progess is slow, but I think I am definitely getting better at it!
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