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Her love was bone white,
 unblemished and
 stunning


[  but never like diamonds.  ]


 Truth then became water to
 pruning fingers and splitting lips,
 while she drowned
 in the mouth
 of a liar like me.

I feel like I've been writing crappy poems recently. That, and right now I feel like a corrupting influence.
(I apologize for spamming you all.)

title suggested by the wonderful ~Choque-Plumbeo
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shep4life Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is truly stunning
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I'm really honored to be the recipient of your words. Thank you so much!
I'm really glad you could enjoy this piece!
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I am glad I got to read this wonderful work
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
:hug::rose:
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shep4life Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
awww :C

but :heart: that first line really pulled me in.
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad it could pull you in, then. Sometimes I forget I've even written such pieces: This one is so short! However, I'm still glad it could offer some enjoyment.
Thank you! :love:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :huggle:
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PaperbackRevelations Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"while she drowned
in the mouth
of a liar like me."

Gaah, so dark, so powerful!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Again, you've found my favorite part to write. You have a talented eye, I think! I mostly say this, because that was the line that I put the most emotion into.

Your comment was so lovely to read. Thank you for such kind words!! :heart:
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PaperbackRevelations Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think the talent is in your writing, so that my eye is able to recognize it! :)
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :blushes: You are far too kind.
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is stunning, and I love the title you ended up with.
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so happy you liked it! The title was ~Choque-Plumbeo's wonderful idea, and I think it is wonderful as well :D

Thank you so much for taking the time to comment! (and I again: I apologize that I'm only responding now)
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(and I again:
*(and again:
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Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013   Writer
I like this, except perhaps that last line - I feel as though it should end after liar.
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for sharing your opinion! I thought it was a good idea to end it after "liar," however, this piece is a bit personal, so I feel the need to keep it as is. I really appreciate that you took the time to give such a suggestion, though: I will try to keep the idea of this in mind when writing my future work!

I also apologize for the late reply: I took a break from deviantART and it ended up being longer than expected!
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Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013   Writer
No problem!
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is one of your beautiful but repetitive poems. That is, it's similar to a lot of your other work. None the less, it's a pleasure to read because of how lovely you can fit words together.
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blushes: thank you. I really see this poem harboring a lot of personal aspects... to see someone really appreciating it makes me smile. Thank you for your wonderful words and for giving me such lovely feedback: I really appreciate it! :glomp:
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schongslipper Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome =]
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RenosGirl77 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Another fantastic piece - your ability to impart such depth of meaning and emotion in so few words is just stunning. Keep up the awesomesauce work!! XD
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: thank you! You always make me smile~
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RenosGirl77 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are most welcome!! :) Glad I could make you happy. That little hug emoticon always makes me grin, so thank you very much for that! :)
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Choque-Plumbeo Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i like it, for a title i would say, Sea
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm... I rather like it! a lot, actually!
Thank you very much for leaving this suggestion... I think it is perfect in being vague yet descriptive. It also seems to sum a lot of the poem up. I will ponder this a little more, but I think this is my favorite suggestion so far! Thanks again :tighthug:
(I'm also glad you liked it~)
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DeathbySkittlez Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You could call it "Lost Lover" I know it's pretty plain but the poem is so great, it just numbs my brain. Good work, though!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for taking the time to leave a suggestion! I like the direction that title is headed... I will definitely make sure I ponder well over it. I also thank you for your lovely compliment; I was so excited to hear you enjoyed it to such an extent~ :hug:
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DeathbySkittlez Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem, great work! I also like "Sea". I think it's great!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I think I actually quite like this title.
I appreciate your input!
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Dreamsickdev Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Maybe it's a strange thought, but I can imagine it with the name "conjurer," perhaps.

Either way, I rather like this one. ^_^
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's not a strange thought! Your idea was actually very helpful! Thank you for taking the time to leave both your lovely comment and your lovely suggestion (:
I will make sure to consider the title well! I was also very happy to hear you liked this poem~ :iconbowplz:
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DreamAmongStars Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Crappy poems my ass! But really, I understand where you're coming from. The world looks pretty horrible when you can't seem to write, doesn't it?

As for a title, I gave this a good fifteen minutes and I'm still coming up with a blank. Sorry ^^;
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes. I can write, of course, but I feel no connection to the words I produce. I feel these sentences are water, seeping through my palms no matter how tightly I try and trap them. I see no beauty in the work I produce, only the pitiful seeds of desperate hope. Perhaps I will be able to still look back on them with pride. If not, I'll probably move them to scraps where I won't have to look at them, ha (:

Do not despair: if it conjures no title, then I will just leave it nameless... I'm sure I'll be able to think of something eventually! I thank you for your time. Truly. It actually means a lot to me that you would spend so long trying to help me. You're one of the best, Dazzy :glomp:.
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DreamAmongStars Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's exactly how I feel! I knew there was a reason I loved you! :tighthug:

I hugged my laptop. Said hug is currently going through the internet until you hug your laptop or computer. Unfortunately, that's the only way we can hug (unless we meet somehow, which most likely won't happen - at least not in the near future).
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awww, I hugged my laptop three times for good measure
I love you, girly! :glomp:

[ well, you never know! Maybe some time in the future we will meet. However, I'm actually very shy in real :flirty: Ha, (: ]
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DreamAmongStars Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm usually shy, as well, but I have a feeling if we were to meet I'd be as loud as a screamo concert when you're standing right next to the speakers x] I wish there was an internet meetup where you get stickers from all of your websites and they have some distinctive sign and then "Hi! My username is _____!" And you'd arrange to meet your friends somewhere at a certain time. Wouldn't that just be so cool? I would devote an entire day to you and Whispie :iconcreepglompplz:
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