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Her love was bone white,
 unblemished and
 stunning


[  but never like diamonds.  ]


 Truth then became water to
 pruning fingers and splitting lips,
 while she drowned
 in the mouth
 of a liar like me.

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I feel like I've been writing crappy poems recently. That, and right now I feel like a corrupting influence.
(I apologize for spamming you all.)

title suggested by the wonderful ~Choque-Plumbeo
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~apple-fresh 4 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
awww :C

but :heart: that first line really pulled me in.
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=minninnewah Apr 21, 2013  Student Writer
"while she drowned
in the mouth
of a liar like me."

Gaah, so dark, so powerful!
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~Nullibicity Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Again, you've found my favorite part to write. You have a talented eye, I think! I mostly say this, because that was the line that I put the most emotion into.

Your comment was so lovely to read. Thank you for such kind words!! :heart:
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=minninnewah Apr 21, 2013  Student Writer
I think the talent is in your writing, so that my eye is able to recognize it! :)
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~Nullibicity Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :blushes: You are far too kind.
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*bloodawni Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is stunning, and I love the title you ended up with.
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~Nullibicity Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so happy you liked it! The title was ~Choque-Plumbeo's wonderful idea, and I think it is wonderful as well :D

Thank you so much for taking the time to comment! (and I again: I apologize that I'm only responding now)
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~Nullibicity Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(and I again:
*(and again:
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I like this, except perhaps that last line - I feel as though it should end after liar.
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~Nullibicity Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for sharing your opinion! I thought it was a good idea to end it after "liar," however, this piece is a bit personal, so I feel the need to keep it as is. I really appreciate that you took the time to give such a suggestion, though: I will try to keep the idea of this in mind when writing my future work!

I also apologize for the late reply: I took a break from deviantART and it ended up being longer than expected!
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