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I'm broken;
Uneven shards litter the carpet.
It looks just like a puzzle
That's waiting to be assembled.

Find the edges—that's where you start.
Piece together my broken heart.
Piece together every dream that's been shattered,
Until it's done nothing else matters.

Working towards the middle,
The pieces don't really fit.
Why won't they come together?
You dismember the puzzle to start all over.

I wish I had the strength to talk,
To tell you sweet and soft:
"Don't bother, it's beyond repair.
You can't fix it; it's felt too much despair."


But you keep trying and trying;
Growing more frustrated and angry.

I dearly wish you'd stay with me....

But I know you'll leave when you realize:
It's no use.
I can't be fixed.

:iconnullibicity:
Sorry if it doesn't make sense. More ramblings from my head...

Edit 7/11/11: So sue me! now apart of the 100 stories challenge. I'm only using this and one other one and then I shall do the rest from scratch XD
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:iconjamyni:
No need to apologize. I've hardly ever seen a poem as stunning as this one.
And it does make sense, but not in a reasonable way. It makes sense because I can so much empathize with these lines. They're not long, but they tell so much about this broken soul.
What I really love is your style. "Flow" is the perfect word to describe it, thanks to the one beneath me. The sensations keep flowing into my mind when I read this and when I'm finished, I'm speechless.
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~Nullibicity Jul 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: Thank you so much for the wonderful comment! I don't get that many thoughtful ones, and so I really appreciate that you took the time to write one.

I've been trying to work on my flow, so I'm really glad you think so! :)

Also I'm very happy that my poem came across to you that way; I'm never quite sure if my poems say what I meant them to say. But my worries are eased on this one.

Thank you very much for the lovely comment :heart:
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~SoundlessWhispers Jul 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
....Another AMAZING POEM!!! Beautifuuul. :nod:
Again the imagery I get is..WOW! and the story and flow is phenomenal.
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~Nullibicity Jul 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I didn't really try for a story line, nor can I see one. I just see the words I wrote; nothing too special, but neither too dull. I have no images when reading my own poems, so it's hard to tell which ones are good. All I do is write down an inspiration and wonder if it sticks.

Thanks for your beautifuuuuuuuul (;)) comment!
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~SoundlessWhispers Jul 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
*tapes Nulli's mouth shut*
Not another word! This poem is amazing and somewhere
deep...
deep...
DEEP down inside you know it too!
(Only said so many deeps because you are WAY too humble)

And a pleasure as always. You are very welcome. :D
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~Nullibicity Jul 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:~X
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~UnicornsInMyBasement Jul 2, 2011  Student Writer
It's amazing, and makes perfect sense to me. You're a beautiful poet:)
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~v3n0m607 Jun 30, 2011  Student Digital Artist
It actually makes perfect sense. I think anyway. I know someone that probably feels like this and could relate to this poem very well. I know that it may seem like you are unfixable but I bet you are (not just saying that to be nice btw). Ive talked with you for a little while now and read a lot of your stuff and you have a great talent for writing. And you seem pretty smart, and as always you are fun to talk too :) (also not just saying that to be nice)
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~Nullibicity Jul 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:aww: Have I ever said how much I love you? I only wish I had friends like you outside of dA. But really, thank you. I do believe that this is the second time you've made me smile and want to glomp you, so to keep traditions up:

:glomp:

I also hope you know that I would be honored to listen to you should you yourself ever feel overburdened with problems. :)

Thank you. Your words really mean a lot.
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~v3n0m607 Jul 1, 2011  Student Digital Artist
No you have not actually :) And I'm glad because making people laugh and smile have always been my favorite things to do. I usually will do anything to make someone laugh XD

And thank you, your words also mean a lot to me :)
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