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Midnight Suspension
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Devour me, moonlight, within your
luminosity.
Tuck me safely within shady craters,
so my eyes may then halt their steady gaze of
longing, so focused that you sometimes
smear with dribbled darkness.
Let me fly from the inside,
my toes burying themselves in light and lunar dust,
twirling as you spin your radiance below.
Grant me absentmindedness,
towards my worries—myself.
Just rip me from my soul,
so I, too, may know the sensation of silent
suspension.
Hmm. I'm not sure if I like the way I paragraphed this one. To me, the way you present it is as important as what's inside it. As for the content: I think I like it! 
I have this strange respect and admiration for the moon, and often find myself unachieving of sleep on the nights its full; I always get restless! Anyway, I think I did my usual emotions and ponderings towards it justice... hopefully you guys will think it's okay, too!
If I could trouble some of you for your thoughts, I would be very grateful!
I have this strange respect and admiration for the moon, and often find myself unachieving of sleep on the nights its full; I always get restless! Anyway, I think I did my usual emotions and ponderings towards it justice... hopefully you guys will think it's okay, too!If I could trouble some of you for your thoughts, I would be very grateful!
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I really like the idea of this girl being carried up to the moon and dancing there. Organization could improve in my opinion. I also think the lines "Lungs shriveling with oxygen deprivation / As I gape and gasp; a fish fresh from water." break the mood and tone. Love your use of italics. Imagery is, as always, fantastic.