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I crawled beneath the skin,
nails taking crescent moons
to labored arteries,
where life birthed.

I gave rash to skin, rippling in marrow,
bulging flesh and pore…
all to break free.

I laid beneath scarlet muscle
sick with Loneliness: a bittersweet
disease of rusting hearts.

I let it throb, pound—ache,
sulking within the cradle of spine,
rocking joints to solemn sleep…

and how easily resignation
was acquired,
for they were weary,
used to hunching to sorrows
resolute

and chronic.

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Melancholia: a mental condition and especially a manic-depressive condition characterized by extreme depression, bodily complaints, and often hallucinations and delusions (merriamwebster.com/dictionary)

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~RenosGirl77 Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hamlet!! Sorry, that's just who this made me think of, for some reason. I think you've captured the nature of Melancholia to an absolute tee - I got chills while reading, which is always good!! :)
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~Nullibicity Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear that!! :heart: Thanks for sharing and taking the time to comment. I really appreciate your words, as always :love:
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~RenosGirl77 May 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's no problem at all, I'm really glad to hear you find my comments so helpful!! :)
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=schongslipper Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Another poem wonderfully laden with imagery and metaphors and sorrow. I wonder... these pieces are all so lovely, but it seems you're a bit stuck in them. I feel you perhaps should try something different to jump your evolution as a writer again. I remember one of your poems, "Monophobia" I think it was? had the difference I feel you can apply to every poem. If you like them how they are, don't change. I'm simply stating that I feel you have perfected this format and it may be time to master another type of writing.
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~Nullibicity Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No, I agree with you. I've been unable to give a name to the problem, but I've felt myself come to a halt with my writing. I couldn't explain it, nor could I continue writing as I had before... I barely squeezed this poem out. Thank you, because I think you've given that elusive name to my problem... and I think I agree completely.
I do have a question, for clarification, though: I didn't understand what exactly you were saying when you spoke of Monophobia. Did you consider the style of that poem to be something that could aid my evolution? I'm pretty much looking for where to start that growth, so I was just curious if that was an option for my starting point.

Thank you so very much for always giving me more than I ask for... both when it comes to support and when it comes to my growth as a writer. :tighthug: I cannot convey my appreciation, because this means so, so much to me.
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=schongslipper Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Good! I'm glad you sensed that too =] Here's my previous comment on Monophobia...

"I think this poem shows improvement. You're starting to not just talk about people and feelings, but to add allusions and broaden your settings. It backs them even better. When you add things like that, the reader has more to grab onto, more to visualize. I saw this in the second verse strongest. It gives your poems... a more exotic feel. I love it. Keep it up; I saw it again in Crescendo, though I think it's done better here. If that didn't make sense, tell me, and I'll try to clarify."

Perhaps you revisit that poem and Crescendo and analyze them? I remember Hide and Seek was another great piece by you, one of my favorite. Look at them and then maybe just write something completely different. Try prose or a structured rhyme scheme. Chances are it won't be good or you won't like it, but that's really not a given. it's just that I think you need to branch out and accept that the results might not be as beautiful as your usual products, but that they'll be more important.
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`dreamsinstatic Nov 23, 2012  Professional Writer
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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~Nullibicity Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Once again I am honored to receive such a wonderful gift. Thank you for your interest and generosity: I remain very grateful!
Best wishes to you~ :hug:
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`dreamsinstatic Nov 27, 2012  Professional Writer
You're welcome.
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