I crawled beneath the skin,
nails taking crescent moons
to labored arteries,
where life birthed.
I gave rash to skin, rippling in marrow,
bulging flesh and pore…
all to break free.
I laid beneath scarlet muscle
sick with Loneliness: a bittersweet
disease of rusting hearts.
I let it throb, pound—ache,
sulking within the cradle of spine,
rocking joints to solemn sleep…
and how easily resignation
was acquired,
for they were weary,
used to hunching to sorrows
resolute
and chronic.









I do have a question, for clarification, though: I didn't understand what exactly you were saying when you spoke of Monophobia. Did you consider the style of that poem to be something that could aid my evolution? I'm pretty much looking for where to start that growth, so I was just curious if that was an option for my starting point.
Thank you so very much for always giving me more than I ask for... both when it comes to support and when it comes to my growth as a writer.
"I think this poem shows improvement. You're starting to not just talk about people and feelings, but to add allusions and broaden your settings. It backs them even better. When you add things like that, the reader has more to grab onto, more to visualize. I saw this in the second verse strongest. It gives your poems... a more exotic feel. I love it. Keep it up; I saw it again in Crescendo, though I think it's done better here. If that didn't make sense, tell me, and I'll try to clarify."
Perhaps you revisit that poem and Crescendo and analyze them? I remember Hide and Seek was another great piece by you, one of my favorite. Look at them and then maybe just write something completely different. Try prose or a structured rhyme scheme. Chances are it won't be good or you won't like it, but that's really not a given. it's just that I think you need to branch out and accept that the results might not be as beautiful as your usual products, but that they'll be more important.
Best wishes to you~