[ I watched ]
she tore sanity
from poetry scabs,
manicures fraying—
chipping.
[ I wept ]
she chased words
beneath scarred vows
within her
drowsy veins.
[ I broke ]
she hung and sang
from her tired seams:
“I finally feel alive.”














I don't think the ending is weak at all, the rest of the poem builds well and your final line really completes it.
A very enjoyable read.
It was my first time really using brackets like that, so I am elated that you think they were used well
To hear you also liked the brackets... I am so happy! I was really nervous about using them at first, but I just didn't like the look of parenthesis.
I must thank you for all your lovely words!! I am so happy to be receiving them