We’d make a beautiful constellation,
You and I –
shivering galaxies that may implode
but who keep expanding,
still hiding in gravitational lenses
of sheer splendor -
a thousand and one stars;
we could wish for personals
or maskless parades
without crippling facades-
not nameless but known.
You and I,
we could be brighter
than the sun.
We’d make a beautiful constellation,
we are infinite
The poetry roadtrip has kept me SO busy, and I've been meaning to post this for a while. Written for myself and *brokenfragilethings
I've never written a poem for anyone before.. so this was a first. We can just relate in so many ways, that I feel we are kindred spirits sometimes. She is also known as my wifey so please go check out her gallery; you won't be disappointed!
I felt it so incredibly much, so I hope you, as readers, can feel it as well.
This just means the world to me.
~ Critique, as always, is deeply appreciated ~
I have missed you beyond words. Your positivity always brings me this sunshine from within me... and it's always so bright and loving that I don't know how it's contained. Thank you. For being beautiful (both inside and out, my lovely lion girl) and for being you. A gorgeous soul. For being hope. I have no words for my gratitude... or my urge to hug you right now
How have you been? (and we may continue in notes if that should be your wish! I just hope you've been well! )
I've been so busy with school, and trying to keep my head above water, but the waves are so rocky, you know what I mean? Adjusting to college has been difficult. I'm glad to be out of my house, though––that already makes me feel better. Yet I'm still battling with my demons, still fighting with myself about every little thing, sometimes it's almost unbearable.
Sometimes, I feel like it swallows me.
But I keep going, I guess, because of wonderful people in my life like you! And your beautiful, beautiful words. You're the sunshine, sunshine.
Everything about you is glimmery gold. Honestly. Nothing past or future can ever change that.
That's how I've been, angelpop. How about you?
(Oh! If you'd prefer notes, I can do that too <3)
You keep fighting, you hear? And you are such a beautifully caring thing... you don't get too hard on yourself when you smack against those rocks, okay? Sometimes we must slip in footing, or make our mistakes before we can continue forward. I'm rooting for you, though! I believe in you! I know you can do this. And I know it's extremely hard... but you are a lioness, love. You show them your teeth and you roar.
I know you aren't really one for reaching out per se, but please know that if you're ever sinking in those waves... I'm here. Be it for random conversation or twenty questions (: I don't want to make you uncomfortable, but I do want to help... even if I'm just a distraction. So feel free to utilize me! I'm a ready tool I'm sure I can think of some bizarre topics for us to converse about!
You always do make me feel like gold so perhaps you have helped me be a bit more shiny. Though I must admit I sometimes feel like fool's gold... like I'm deceiving and nothing more. However, there are such lovely people (definitely being yourself! ) who help me more than they'll ever know. . Thank you. More than words.
I don't mind conversing here! I'm fine with anything, I just wanted to make sure you knew every option is open!
I'm.. okay. I've definitely been better! Ha. However, I'm working things out. I can honestly say I'm okay, though... because I'm reminding myself more to be positive, and it's a wonderful thing! I really love seeing happiness and beauty in everything. I mean, who needs drugs when the best producer is in your brain? It just takes some shift in perspective (: So, I think I'm stable now! I am performing with my show choir, and we went to a few places I had previously gone with someone else, a person who made a sort of trauma in my life, and so it was very hard at first. However, I couldn't give in! That would mean he had won. So I performed the best I could, and I tried to keep moving forward with a smile. It took a while to actually get there, but I'm doing much better now. It was just hard remembering (:
Oh my! Thanks for sharing! I'd really love to have a look, so I'll try and zoom over when I find the time (or right after this comment, unless something comes up )!! I'm sure it's just fantastic!
My, your compliment was just so lovely, too! Thank you so very much!!!! I just appreciated your words so deeply You're lovely!
I appreciate your lovely words, especially because this piece is so special to me! I usually write such horrible "happy" poems, so this was a bit of a challenge, but one that I enjoyed. I'm also incredibly happy to see people liking it for this very reason. Thank you very much.
Thank you so very much!
You always make me smile! Especially "...this just seems intimate on a whole other level." Just wow! I'm so happy!! I really meant for this to strike some personal chords... so I'm ecstatic that could show through. Thank you so much for your support: You always make me smile with your comments <3
Oh my. I apologize for taking so long to reply! I've become quite busy as of late.
I wanted to thank you for taking the time to leave a comment! I really appreciate the fact that you did! I also am grateful for your honesty. Sometimes it is hard to hear such things, but I really want to say that I take them to heart! I believe that all critique offers lessons and such helpful advice! I read over this a couple of times, and I do have to agree with you. I will contemplate alternate endings in my free time, though I cannot guarantee I will 100% change this, since it was written for a particular person in mind, and while I may be cliché, this is the message I wanted to tell her. Thank you for taking the time out of your day to be so helpful, though! I really was glad to hear your thoughts on this poem!
Have a lovely day!
Oh my goodness. I don't even know what to say. Your writing in general always stuns me, the simple and beautiful way you use gorgeous words to paint an even more breathtaking image is completely wonderful. I envy that ability of yours!
And, okay, the fact that this was written with me slightly in mind as well is like IDGEUHWJKEHUKREJJD
I've never had anything so lovely done for me. This is the cutest thing in the entire world. I'M SMILING SO MUCH IT'S GOING TO /KILL ME/.
Honestly omfg I am officially completely in love yoU WROTE ME POETRY (NOT ONLY ME BUT US BUT SAME DIFFERENCE YOU KNOW YOU WROTE ME POETRY IN WHICH I AM INCLUDED IN)
MY HEART IS YOURS. GOOD LUCK. I HOPE YOU KNOW WHAT YOU JUST GOT YOURSELF INTO.
But seriously, wifey, you're positively fantastic, and the sweetest girl in the whole entire world, and you're always trying to do things to cheer me up, and I JUST RIDICULOUSLY LOVE YOU.
Thanks for keeping me in mind, I'm so positively honored for this.
Let me just squeeze the life out of you, here. I apologize for taking so long to reply! I always just love your messages, and I want to make sure I respond right! Or that I at least have the proper time to be genuine and thoughtful! I do so appreciate you.
such compliments! Oh goodness. THANK YOU! <3 You make me smile and giggle and just laugh! I really appreciate that you are extending such words to me! Sometimes I feel like a crap writer, but this helps me to know that others can still appreciate these mutilated words I often write. I definitely am still trying to improve, so hopefully one day I can become better! Until then, it is encouragement such as this that just keeps me chuggin' right along!
I'M SO GLAD YOU ARE HAPPY! TRULY! :HUGGLE::HEART: That just makes my day!
lease know that this was mostly written entirely for you - with thoughts of you. I just seem to write personal a lot, so I wasn't quite sure how to proceed. I just wanted to write a little message for us both, but yes: this is mostly entirely made while I was thinking of you and your lovely, beautiful self! So yes, it pretty much is a poem for you! I really hope you enjoyed it, or liked it. I just wuv you soooo much heehee
I shall take care of this heart with all of my abilities but seriously: thank you. You are too kind and lovely!
oh my. there never seem to be words for how much I've come to adore you! Then you shower me with such compliments and I just get to blushing and dying of appreciation! Thank you. I LOVE YOU TOO! This is why we're married v_v
I'm so glad to hear that, and I'm extremely happy! It was completely my pleasure to write this poem, and I actually really enjoyed it! Thank you for inspiring me, so!
You are definitely not a crappy writer, oh my goodness, your work is so lovely I'm always awed by it fgsiudhkljzfsnm
I WISH I HAD A SHRED OF YOUR TALENT<3
You really do have a gift and I hope you can remember that every day
THIS HONESTLY IS ONE OF THE NICEST THINGS ANYONE HAS EVER DONE FOR ME. I JUST WANT YOU TO KNOW
I APPRECIATE IT SO MUCH AND I COME BACK HERE AND READ IT ALL THE TIME AND LIKE
ITS SO SWEET. THANK YOU
I LOVE YOU TOO BISCUIT XOXOXOOX <3
Haha! This is definitely why we're married 8D
YOU'RE TOO PERFECT FOR THIS WORLD HOW DID YOU EVER MANAGE TO SETTLE FOR ME
I'm glad you could enjoy it! And oh, man, I don't know if I've ever inspired anyone before--so it means a lot ;//w//;
"And in this moment, I felt infinite,"
I LOVE THAT MOVIE AND BOOK
Simply amazing. I didn't actually make the connection until after everything was written. Perhaps I've read and watched it so many times, that it is just engrained into my mind
Of course I haven't read the book
I would recommend it, if you have the time! It was refreshing to read the author's words for such a concept, and I did enjoy it!
I will make sure to look for it
Yes buy it! haha. I still have to buy both, but my friend has it so we watch it all the time. Just a lovely, lonely tale that is just sure to win over one's heart! I'm really glad I was able to discover it.
This really is just nitpicking but, I thought 'who' before 'keep expanding' shouldn't be there, and perhaps the word 'mere' instead of 'more'? I really hate picking out things, written things are so beautiful, I barely want to criticise them. :>
Oh, you're completely fine! Thank you for pointing out ways to improve this piece! I feel that "mere" is a demeaning word, sometimes. What do you think about "sheer?" Do you think that would work a bit better?
The "who" is my faulty attempt for parallel structure, which I'm pretty sure outright failed xD I thank you for saying that it doesn't really work. I just don't really like the rhythm without the extra syllable there... hmmm... I may have to think this one over a bit, and see if I can't come up with something else, instead.
Please don't apologize! I actually really LOVE critique, so I cannot thank you enough; I also just feel like I've gotten stuck in my writing, so some constructive direction is just wonderful <3 <3
It is a little diminishing~ I think 'sheer' sounds lovely in that sentence, for some reason I thought the word 'dear' might fit too. (:
Hmm, how about, 'but are forever expanding'? And I can understand, sometimes it just doesn't feel right with out a syllable in certain places. :>
Hahah~ I feel the same way actually, I'm sometimes afraid though, it can become so ugly so quickly if one isn't humble in their approach. >_< But I'm very happy to hear I may have been of some help~ :>