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Think not of decay when reapers lay claim,
Nor of sharp loss in following mourning;
On that day let hushed pleasantries acclaim.
And kiss the life from dulled eyes, unseeing.

Find not thy feet above flower-laid stones:
‘Neath earthly linen I shan’t rouse for thee.
So whether memories make new or old:
Beloved love, remember me fondly.

Sell thy sorrows to swift merchanting winds,
Be stolen by thy existence and time.
Overlook me for sanity’s defense,
But discard me not to the undefined.

My life doth re-begin through memory,
So my beloved love: remember me.

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In my personal opinion, this is the best sonnet I've ever done. I really immersed myself, and it really began to get personal when I thought of it in terms of application; I would really like it if people could approach my passing this way.

I hope the emotion can strike the reader into the thought and effort I've put into this (I spent about 2 hours on it :iconimdeadplz:... and it's still rough in some places T^T)

:bulletblue: Feedback/critique is deeply appreciated :bulletblue: :blowkiss:
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Submitted to #Open-Mic-Poetry's sonnet contest. Inspiration struck, so I decided I would not lose anything by entering.
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Mood: Adoration ~PassionandPromise Apr 22, 2013  Student Writer
I absolutely love this- it actually reads like something you'd hear from Shakespeare, and quotes from my favourite sonnet by him- "No longer mourn for me when I am dead." I love your poetry, thank you so much for sharing it here, to all the world. You have an amazing gift.
xxx

AND IT ISN'T ROUGH ANYWHERE!!!!
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~Nullibicity Apr 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: Why thank you! I honestly am not sure how to reply after hearing such a compliment! I did mess up the "stress-unstress, etc" part, though, of the sonnet. However, this is just so dear to me that I cannot change it... but I was so pleased you could like it as is in all its malfunctioned glory :giggle:

No one has ever thanked me for writing before :tighthug: I must thank you for reading and taking the time to comment! I am so touched that my writing could have such an affect (: thank you so very much :thanks:
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Mood: Love ~RenosGirl77 Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. You...just...Don't die, but I simply have to compare you to Shakespeare and Keats on this one. Wow that's incredible. The extent to which you were immersed in your inspiration really comes through - I would agree with you that this is definitely one of your very best!! Loved it to absolute pieces - I hope you don't mind, but my walls are probably going to be covered in your awesomesauce poetry pretty soon!! XD
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~Nullibicity Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What compliments!! :blushes: :blushes:
Thank you! You make my spirit lift so far! Although, I did botch the iambic pentameter as I usually do with my sonnets. Though... I like this one far too much to revise it. :shrug:
Thanks for such nice words! They made me smile (:
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~RenosGirl77 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
You are most welcome, you absolutely deserve them!! XD I seriously cannot express how much I love your poetry.

I didn't even notice any discrepancies with the iambic pentameter. This was seriously amazing; it is pasted onto my wall in pride of place as we speak. XD

I'm so glad to hear you find my comments as helpful and uplifting as I find your poems!! And thank you so much for always taking the time to reply to me. :)
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~Nullibicity 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
and I cannot express how grateful I am for this! You are truly a great and wonderful support to me!

Oh goodness. Every time you mention "the wall" I do, like, the most embarrassing, internal happy dance :XD: I am honored to have my work on your wall. I can not think of a better place for it to be! I wouldn't want it anywhere else. :heart:

You are most welcome! I quite love you dearly :hug: thank you for always taking the time to both comment and reply!
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~RenosGirl77 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, I'm so happy to hear I am able to help you that much!! :) You're a fantastic source of support for me too. :huggle:

Hee hee, glad to hear it!! XD It's this one wall of my bedroom, and it's like totally covered in your amazing poetry - I'm running out of space!! It's really fantastic, because the first thing I see when I wake up in the morning is one of your awesome poems, and it really motivates me and lets me start my day with a spring in my step. Plus, whenever my friends come over we nearly always end up having like a huge in-depth discussion about one of your pieces, just because they're up there on the wall. XD

:tighthug: Love you too my dear friend, you are absolutely welcome. :)
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exalt! you are one amazing poet.
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~Nullibicity Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much! I am unsure if my writing is really worthy of such compliments, but I shall thank you all the same: I really appreciated your words; they warmed my heart!
Thank you, also, for the watch: I hope to not disappoint you in the future. :iconbowplz:
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~scorpiandoll Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I hate myself for my bad english :( I just know that this is beautiful but I can't make a 'valuable' comment because my english suck
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